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Nepal ko chora
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Posted on 06-16-08 7:12
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A dark dream
Awful life crawling without any reason, touch without sense, time without season. Sleeping awake and choking on the grim, listening loudly to those silent scream.
Life frowns at me, passess a cancerous sore, a squalid parasite feeding on my inner core. I am on my knees, pretending alive but dead, glaring at the invisible blood I've just bled.
Eyes are red and cold hands are fisted, deep inside, I am warped, I am twisted. So many tricks and then so many lies, Too many whens, whats and too many whys.
I am crushed to pieces from those ruthless hand, mystery of infliction, I just can't understand. I sense deep inside that somehow, I am dying, palpates my soul and all that's underlying.
Soundless and sightless, unseen and unheard, boundless and mindless, obscure and absurd. All empathy lying ungraced, unbraced, unemployed, I am perishing, in dark dream, obliterating the void.
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pjna007
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Posted on 06-16-08 7:31
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Aww
nk chora dhereyi pachi ayou ni yesto poem leara, sab thik thak cha hainta?
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Posted on 06-16-08 7:42
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NKC,
कस्तो मन नरमाइलो हुने रैछ यो पढेर। तर जिन्दगीको बास्तबिक्ता नैं त्यस्तै हुन्छ।
मलाइ रबिन शर्माको एउटा गीत याद आयो।
"म जिन्दगी भर हिडिरहे, तर कहिं पनि पुगेनछु................"
त्यस्तै लाग्यो तिम्रो कबिता पनि।
Eyes are red and cold hands are fisted, deep inside, I am warped, I am twisted. So many tricks and then so many lies, Too many whens, whats and too many whys.
Very true! thanks a lot!
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dipika02
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Posted on 06-16-08 7:47
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aboiii yo nepchu lai bela bela ma ke hunchha kunni?
it's awesome, no doubt on that, after all it's written by "Nepchu The Great" but my friend it's scary too. Aba ramailo poem lekhata khurukka
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dipika02
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Posted on 06-16-08 7:48
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woi prez n craz nepchule post garna paaeko chaina haamiharuko comments ko line suru bhaechha
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cheli
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Posted on 06-16-08 7:51
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Nepchhe da, poetry is very good , no doubts on that. But, why do u sound very pessimistic most of the times?
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Yakku
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Posted on 06-16-08 8:08
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NKC bro, What happened again? Those lines reflect that bad dreams are still haunting you. I hope all is well with you. Nevertheless, it was a nice poem. Keep 'em coming.
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kalejo
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Posted on 06-16-08 10:53
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nkc bro, what's going on आम्बो ब्रो त बबाल सेन्टी भछन्त हौ। के स्स्स्स्स्स्स्स्स्स्स्सारो लेखेको हौ
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Juggy
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Posted on 06-17-08 7:12
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Ambooo bro!! Lop nai napari trag paro ki k ho?? why bhanne prasna phiri aayo hai!! Nice one there, enjoyed it!!
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mno
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Posted on 06-17-08 7:40
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nice one. But a sad and depressing poem.
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Captain Haddock
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Posted on 06-17-08 10:12
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Good going - keep it up :)
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Amazing
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Posted on 06-17-08 3:57
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Nepche.........back with a bang.....!!! Great one bro....AS USUAL :-)
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Posted on 06-17-08 4:12
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Nepal ko chora that a real good lyrics for a heavy metal song. if its ok with you I want to composegive it some music....and sing it......let me know if I have your permission.
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Posted on 06-17-08 4:30
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Nepal ko chora,
Even though it sounds sad, it is a very nice poem. Your choice of words is very impressive. Keep it up.
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Nepal ko chora
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Posted on 06-17-08 4:50
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Prerana, everything is fine at my side. Thank you very much your concern and support. A little bird told me that you are working on a romantic poem. When will we be blessed to read that master piece?
CL, that was a nice song you mentioned there. When someone tries to define the reality life, these words from Emerson comes to my mind - "Life is a train of moods like a string of beads; and as we pass through them they prove to be many colored lenses, which paint the world their own hue, and each shows us only what lies in its own focus." Thank you very much for the support, glad that you liked those lines.
Dipu, hahaha "Nepchu The Great"... that was quite an honor which I think I don't deseve. As always, I am indebted for those inspiring remarks of yours. Ok, I promise to bring something joyous next time.
Cheli Sis, thank you very much for your encouragement. Regarding your doubt, I am not a pessimist by any means. Gloominess and felicity are two sides of the coin called life. It was just an attempt to explore a bit of dark side of the life this time; I have depicted bright side of the life in earlier attempts. As Carl Jung says : "There are as many nights as days, and the one is just as long as the other in the year's course. Even a happy life cannot be without a measure of darkness, and the word 'happy' would lose its meaning if it were not balanced by sadness."
Yakku bro, long time no see. How are things rolling at your side? The era of bad dreams is already over; it was just an attempt to uncover some somberness that life may have to encounter once in a blue moon.
Kalejo bro, thank you for dropping by to leave a humorous note. You will be glad to hear that I am fully fit and fine, was just trying to reflect some melancholy in those lines; nothing serious.
Juggy bro, thanks for a good laugh. You don't need to drink few bottles of whiskey to pretend that you are drunk, do you? Good to hear that the stanzas were able to bask you.
MNO jyu, I am glad to know that you liked those verses. Thank you very much for your supportive note.
Cappy, nice to see you here. How you doing recently? Hope everything is well with you. I appreciate your boosting annotation. :)
Jhilke bro, it's nice to see you alive and kicking here in sajha again. Thank you very much for those charging words.
Maddogg, I will be more than happy if you want to transform those words into a song. Please feel free to do so.
Sujaata, I am glad to hear that you liked those lines, thank you very much for those boosting phrases.
Last but not the least, I convey my gratitude to all the silent readers as well.
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Rahuldai
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Posted on 06-17-08 4:54
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नेप्चे ब्रो, जाँच भएको ले पढ्न भ्याको थिएन, बल्ल पढियो। अंग्रेजी कमजोर भए नि बुझ्ने कोशीश गरियो। सुन्दर सिर्जना को लागि बधाई।
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pjna007
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Posted on 06-17-08 5:19
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A little bird told me
nk chora, pakha na bharkar ta mero kabita ko title jurye ko cha, pura bhaisak pachi sunai halchu ni -- oh yeah it sure will be a masterpiece lol
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Posted on 06-17-08 9:32
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NKC, If everything is fine with you, then it's superb. You've got a wonderful talent of expressing feelings in words. Keep'em coming.
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Nepal ko chora
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Posted on 06-17-08 11:48
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ठुल्दाइ, हजुरको जाच अवश्य पनि राम्रो भयो होला। ब्यस्त भए पनी पढेर दुई शब्द ब्यक्त गरिदिनु भएकोमा आभारी छु।
Prerana, just title so far? We all are eagerly waiting for your masterpiece. Please, don't make this wait long one.
Aashma, I am overwhelmed by your words. Thanks a lot for those inspiring remarks.
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sumiit
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Posted on 06-18-08 7:21
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Nice Poem Nepal Ko Chora,
Keep up the spirit and don't let it go! things will turn out better pretty soon, probably in next poem. :)
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