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 Monsoon Engagement : A short story

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Posted on 05-14-06 9:22 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Chapter One : Sunshine

"Chhoreeeeee!!" she heard her mom's excited voice as she pushed her luggage cart through arrival gate at Tribhuvan Airport. Amidst the sea of taxi drivers, policemen, gun-totting soldiers, placard-bearing hotel staff and occasional shouts of "Bahini, taxi chainchha?" , she saw her mom rush towards her with a big smile and wide-open arms.

"Mummy" was all she could muster as her throat went dry . It had been 7 years since she met her mom and she struggled to stay composed as her mom wrapped her in her arms and asked "Kasto chaa talai?"

"Mummy!" she said again and found herself at a loss for words. She had told herself when she boarded the plane in Los Angeles that she would not cry when she saw her mom but somehow a few drops had managed to trickle down her cheeks. She wanted to ask "Malai kina America jana dieko? Kina narokeko? Kina hajur haru sangai narakheko?" Nothing of the sort came out as she looked at her mother's ever so beautiful and radiant face.

"Oho choreei, ayi pugyau timi?" she sensed a faint quaver in her dad's voice. Her dad looked so much older than the last time she saw him in LA. He had grayed significantly around the temples and a receding hairline now stood prominently atop his otherwise handsome face.

"Oye! Ke chha talai? her brother slapped her on the back as she lay buried in her mom's arms "Manchhe hasi hasi niskanchan airport bata, ta chai kina ruyeko ni? America lai miss garna thali sakis ho? Ki koi American lai?" As always, he was the first to laugh at his own joke.

"Nakara, badta naho" she regained her composure "Mummy, dada ke bha esto!"

"Khoi, ke bha! Ghar ma kahile basne hoina" her mother lamented and went down her laundry list of complaints "Khali ghumnu phirnu matra chha. Sathi haru sabai bihe garna thali sake, tero dai lai ta hero bhayera restaurant chaharnu ra ghumnu matra parchha"

They all laughed as her brother pushed the trolley towards an awaiting vehicle.

"Aaan, sachi, oo chai Bibek ho" her mom pointed towards a guy standing next to her. "Geeta aunty ko nata parchha , Australia bata asti enginering sakera ayeko"

She could barely register a nod at him as he said "Hi". He smiled back and quickly took leave of her parents. The ride home from the airport was filled with excited conversation and laughter as everybody seemed to be speaking on top of their voices, often at the same time and sometimes over each other. The blue Kathmandu sky and the majestic Ganesh Himal added to the feeling of perfect bliss.
 
Posted on 05-15-06 12:52 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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that was a hilarious ending :-D

good one...short and prolly what everyone wanted to hear?
:-D
 
Posted on 05-15-06 12:55 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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oho its cool but anjana and that guy from ny have already met ni ta.. but i liked it, thatd be really funny and embarassing and totally coincidental!!~

nice though
****
 
Posted on 05-15-06 1:19 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Wow,

This is the best thread in Sajha, I had ever read.............

It made my day................now the time for work.

Cheers,
 
Posted on 05-15-06 1:28 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Still my heart gently weeps ;)
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I look at you all see the love there that's sleeping
While my heart gently weeps
I look at the floor and I see it needs sweeping
Still my heart gently weeps

I don't know why nobody told you
how to unfold your love
I don't know how someone controlled you
they bought and sold you

I look at the world and I notice it's turning
While my heart gently weeps
With every mistake we must surely be learning
Still my heart gently weeps

I don't know how you were diverted
you were perverted too
I don't know how you were inverted
no one alerted you

I look from the wings at the play you are staging
While my heart gently weeps
As I'm sitting here doing nothing but aging
Still my heart gently weeps
==============================


Great narration. I wish the climax was less hastened though.
 
Posted on 05-15-06 1:34 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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bhusan - you just ruined the story ke! :( :(
 
Posted on 05-15-06 2:00 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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hehhehe :-P

nails ...write how you would end it?
:-D
 
Posted on 05-15-06 2:42 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Wonderful story SAJHA gazer but I doubt if its CONTD of ur precious story I MET HER ON SAJHA. Once again I feel sorry for Sajha Gazer, I guess its his own story. Its tragic indeed!

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Euta manchhe ko mayale kati farak pardachhha Jindagai ma-------
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Yestai ho Sajha gazer bro, aafno aafno katha.....LOL, Once again thanks for good piece, especially I liked three words SUNSHINE, CLOUD and RAIN.
 
Posted on 05-15-06 2:45 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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if there was a next chapter, what would it be called?
 
Posted on 05-15-06 4:19 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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SUNAMI


Cheers,
 
Posted on 05-15-06 5:36 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Bhusan - that was an interesting and hilarious epilogue. And it seems to have come much to the delight of romantics like Nails (and perhaps AeutiKT as well) ... he he

Nails, AeutiKT - I dunno why, but I tend to think somethings are best left unsaid and this is what was implied in the ending. You should take away from it whatever you like andcontinue the rest of the story, if you feel there is any, however you like.

AZNShawty - Yours has got to be the most intersting nickname in Sajha :) . But I must admit I have been scratching my head on the meaning though (especially the "AZN" part) ... but whatever it is, it is neat! :)

Mr Lonely - That was superb! Very profound indeed :)

Amazing - LOL. I am laughing as I write this. I think I should put the standard Bollywood disclaimer : "The events and characters portrayed herein are purely fictional and are not intended to bear any resemblance whatsoever to actual people, places or events, living or dead - including me!"

Miracle - LOL. Funny , that was exactly what I was thinking
 
Posted on 05-15-06 6:05 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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you are right! open ended stories are the best..it gives the readers a chance to let their imagination go wild re kya :-D

Sometime you want to know what would happen next but at the end probably each and everyone will not be satisfied. My ending to the story would be something different ...different from bhusan's as well :-D It's always fun to read different stories :-D
 
Posted on 05-15-06 9:24 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Ahh!
The story seems one of a kind - a very precious thing that lovebirds tuck into their bleeding hearts and nurture it till they die- very humane indeed!
Sajha Gazer, you write simple yet translucent prose. The theme has been astutely presented.

'KAASH'- TO YOU

Manaa ke dono ke alag the raaste
Phir kyun fidaa the wo ek doosre ke waaste

Hawa ke sarsaraahat abhi bhi latein hai tumhari khusboo
Kya ye naacheez doori hi thi jo wo karna sakey rubroo

Aaj bhi mujhko uski aahat ka hai ahsaas
Lagta hai usi ke liye hai mere man mandir goom soom aur udaas

Dekh raha tha main uske do chalakte nain
Rok na paya bas kho diya apna saara sukoon aur chain

Kaash thaam liya hota uske najuk kalai
Na banti wo tumse door aur parai

Ab karen bhi to kya bas karke usko yaad
Aage dekho to door nazar ayenge sunehre din aur raat
Dekhlo nighen daal ke usi manzil pe miloge phir ek kamsin khaas.

:) Aadaab
 
Posted on 05-15-06 9:24 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Ahh!
The story seems one of a kind - a very precious thing that lovebirds tuck into their bleeding hearts and nurture it till they die- very humane indeed!
Sajha Gazer, you write simple yet translucent prose. The theme has been astutely presented.

'KAASH'- TO YOU

Manaa ke dono ke alag the raaste
Phir kyun fidaa the wo ek doosre ke waaste

Hawa ke sarsaraahat abhi bhi latein hai tumhari khusboo
Kya ye naacheez doori hi thi jo wo karna sakey rubroo

Aaj bhi mujhko uski aahat ka hai ahsaas
Lagta hai usi ke liye hai mere man mandir goom soom aur udaas

Dekh raha tha main uske do chalakte nain
Rok na paya bas kho diya apna saara sukoon aur chain

Kaash thaam liya hota uske najuk kalai
Na banti wo tumse door aur parai

Ab karen bhi to kya bas karke usko yaad
Aage dekho to door nazar ayenge sunehre din aur raat
Dekhlo nighen daal ke usi manzil pe miloge phir ek kamsin khaas.

:) Aadaab
 
Posted on 05-16-06 12:51 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Sajha Gazer --- simply brilliant
 
Posted on 05-16-06 6:13 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Vantage Point - wah, wah wah .... you are on heck of a poet. I have no rebuttal or answer .... simply lajawab as they say! I have noticed your poetry in other places as well and think you are a gifted poet.

Gurl_Interrupted, Plymouth - Thanks for reading and for your comments.

Also, a quick correction, in Chapter 2, the sentence should read "...You are getting old and if you don't get married now you will never find a groom later"

Apologies for the slip of the fingers :D
 
Posted on 05-16-06 8:23 PM     Reply [Subscribe]
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wow, really liked it. nice narration. Reminds me of home :(
sajha gazer, keep it up
 
Posted on 05-17-06 1:23 AM     Reply [Subscribe]
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I love you guys....one of the better threads read in months....keep posting and make it alive..

vantage sweetie...ek bar aur sahibaan!!!!!
 
Posted on 05-17-06 2:31 AM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Asian shorty =AZNshawty
 
Posted on 05-17-06 2:56 AM     Reply [Subscribe]
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arent we all suckers for happy endin!!!admit it!!!!;oP hehe..

anyways sajha_gazer nice!!!:oD

btw if me memory doesnt fail(yes i have memory power ppl!!failure proves it?;oP hehe)..kayho..linked to 'sajha' again?coincidence ho ki?daal may kuch kala hai! and no!dun say its mixed with kala daal!its not! re kya ;oP

can i hear some 'wah wah' s?;oP hehe...got a bit inspired by vantage there ;oP hehe..btw wat does 'rubroo' and 'khamsin khas' mean?i think i might have understood wat they meant..but then again most prob not :oS hehe..so anyone?:oS hehe..apun ko bhi thoda thoda hindi ahta hai..kya?..didnt understand?:oS NAHEEEEEEEN!!!! :o( oh well i tried :oS hehe..

and its ALIVE!!!!!!!!!!!!JG bro for u!re kya ;oP hehe..tho i guess fren wont notice..and if he notices..wont mind seein some 'suspicious' stain on the monitor :oS..duh!;oP hehe..

*takes deep slow breathes*
enuf of hyperness :o)..its scares me :oS hehe..

good day!:oD
 
Posted on 05-17-06 8:52 AM     Reply [Subscribe]
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Beautiful narration. But too cheesy. Clearly an effect of overexposure to Bollywood Movies.
 



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